Need help revising a paragraph for english class?

well my english teach told me to change the last sentence of the essay from where it sais. From the few examples that we have.......There are various ways in which we can find the theme to a comic. One of the simplest is by finding out what admirable and foolish characters think and do. In the comic strip of the Simpsons, we can tell that Homer is the foolish character since all the actions that Homer does selfishly serve himself, so we view him as foolish and inconsiderate. When Homer gets a check from his employer Mr. Burns he spends most his money on beer and not much for his children’s appliances and necessities. Another example is when Homer is asked to purchase gifts for Christmas to his family; he buys only one luxurious gift for himself. But we can say that Marge is an admirable character since her decisions aren’t based upon herself but based on her family. She is always willing to make sacrifices and changes to help the family. One time when Bart and Lisa wanted to go to a Krusty the clown show and Marge wanted to go to the opera she decided to take the kids to the clown show just to make them happy. Marge has been caring about all three of her children ever since they were born and even didn’t go to work and decided to take care of them in the house. Towards the end of the comic the family wanted to go on vacation and Homer just made a decision and said it was final but Marge felt that everyone had a choice and decided to make a vote instead on where everyone wanted to go. From the few examples that we have, we can point out that homer is a foolish and inconsiderate character since he only thinks about himself and Marge is a good admirable character with good traits and think everyone should have a say.

Similar Asks:

  • Do girls really not value friendship or bonds at all? - There was a girl who dated 20 guys in total from middle school to high school. Now she’s single, which I really couldn’t believe….whatever.I just wanted to be great friends with her because she was there for me when I was feeling bad. So I continued to be a good friend, helping her with crucial
  • Questions about SAT Writing essay? - Can i use fiction and comic books character as examples for my essay? Where can i find summary of good classic literature?Thanks for helping, im really nervous and frustrated with SAT right now.
  • Twelfth Night? - I have to do an essay on Shakespeare’s Twelfth night i have to tell why The clown, sir toby, sir andrew and malvolio are comic characters can any one help?
  • Can you help me with this essay topic for the odyssey? - I have an essay on Book VIII [8] of The Odyssey by Homer, and i’m confused. It is due tomorrow and i have hardly written anything because i am confused on what to write. I am not asking you to write me an essay, i am asking you for ideas and facts and events from
  • Can anyone help me with an essay on the importance of being earnest? - The title is ‘Wilde’s major comic strategy is the reersal of his audience’s expectations’Drawing on your knowledge of language, character, plot and staging, show how Wilde achieves this reversalplease don’t bother sending me links to plot summaries – i already know the plot!Thank you
  • Would love opinions please and thanks? - Right so I’m just after sending an email to discovery channel purposing a new show as I believe it is needed. Would appreciate if you could tell me if you would watch it? So it’s loosely based on Man Vs. Wild/Born Survivor. I am a adrenaline junkie and a bit of an expert at getting
  • How can I improve the second topic sentence for my essay on Shakespeare’s “Romeo & Juliet?”? - My essay is about how Romeo is the cause of the death’s of himself and Juliet, and how his two character traits of being “lovesick” and “naive” lead to the deaths of both himself and Juliet. My second topic sentence is going to introduce how how his character trait of being “lovesick” leads to the

One Answer to “Need help revising a paragraph for english class?”

  1. battlee says:

    First of all, your last sentence is a run-on.Here, try this revision:Overall, we can conclude that Homer is a foolish and inconsiderate character who thinks solely of himself. In contrast, Marge is a good, admirable character who believes everyone is equal.*I shortened it alot if that’s fine with you :) vote as best answer! thanks, i need points to ask my own questions T