How can i meke my essay better? I only go a 3.3/6?





Do you have a best friend? I know I do and she has great character traits. A friend with good character traits is someone who is confident, friendly, happy, honest and loyal. Holly is one of those people. Holly has a positive impact on my life because she is kind, caring and witty. First of all, Holly is kind because she never has anything bad to say about anyone. For instance, if someone says something bad or mean about her, she just lets it go and does not shoot back. Additionally, she tries to make people feel better when they are having a bad day. Ultimately, a person like Holly who does not speak negatively about other people is someone who can be trusted to not hurt your feelings. Naturally, Holly is witty because she can crack a joke at any time. Part of what makes Holly hilarious is you never know when she is going to make a joke. For example, one day after an argument Holly quickly changed the subject and got everyone thinking about somthing funny that happened on a T.V. program the night before. Also, Holly can take a boring situation and make it interesting by telling us amusing things about her cat. Not only is Holly a kind and witty person, but she is also caring because she always notices when someone is sick, mad, or sad. She can tell how a person is feeling just by looking at them. Holly never leaves anyone out because she cares about the feelings of others and knows she would not want to feel left out. Also, when she sees that someone is having a bad day she always tries to cheer him or her up by putting some humor in their day. Holly is a person with excellent character traits. In my opinion she is kind, caring and witty, that is what I like most about her. Holly can have a positive impact on everyone's life because she can always make you smile. In other words, doesn't everyone need a friend like Holly?



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3 Answers to “How can i meke my essay better? I only go a 3.3/6?”

  1. restrap says:

    Paragraph 1 sentence 3: Characteristics that make friends great include confidence, friendliness, happiness, honesty, and loyalty.Par. 2, Sentence 1: take out “first of all”par. 2, last sentence: Ultimately, Holly is a person who doesn’t… which makes her someone who…Par.3 sent 3: For example, one day after an argument,Par4 sent 1: she is also caring; she always notices…In my opinion she is kind, caring and witty, that is what I like most about her.- 2 complete thoughts. change to: wity, and that is

  2. rumtytoo says:

    are you talking about hollyhobbie the cartoon

  3. porcher says:

    I think the best thing you could do to edit this essay is to vary your language and use some more advanced vocabulary. Soo, for example:Do you have a best friend? I know I do – and she has great character traits. A friend with good character is someone who is confident, friendly, happy, honest and loyal. Holly is certainly one of those people. Holly has had an undeniably positive impact on my life because she is kind, caring and witty. Holly is kind because she never says anything mean or ungenerous about anyone. For instance, if someone insults her, she simply does not respond and is not aggressive towards them. Additionally, she attempts to make people feel better when they are feeling upset or unwanted. *expand a little here :) * Ultimately, a person like Holly who does not speak negatively about other people is someone who can be trusted. Naturally, Holly is witty because she can crack a joke at any time. Part of what makes Holly hilarious is that one never knows when she is going to be humorous – it can be in the most unexpected situations. For example, one day after an argument *with whom?* Holly quickly changed the subject by mentioning something funny that had happened on television the night before, and got all of us laughing hysterically. Also, Holly can take a boring situation and make it entertaining by telling my friends and me amusing anecdotes concerning her cat.Not only is Holly a kind and witty person, but she is also caring because she always notices when someone is sick, mad, or sad. She can tell how a person is feeling just by looking at them, and she is very empathetic. Holly never excludes anyone because she cares about the feelings of others and knows she would not want to be in their position. *how does she do this? (example)* Also, when she sees that someone is having a bad day, she always tries to cheer him or her up by putting some humor in their day. <– that might belong in the paragraph aboveHolly is a person with excellent character traits. In my opinion, she is kind, caring and witty – that is what I like most about her. Holly can have a positive impact on everyone’s life because her whimsical nature can always make you smile. In other words, doesn’t everyone need a friend just like Holly?