What do you think of this essay…i am 17…i entered it into a contest a couple weeks back….is it any good?

"Faith is important to me. Faith is believing in something more than what's right in front of you. It is allowing yourself to let your guard down and not caring what anyone else thinks of you. Because in the end, no one will care if you were homecoming queen in high school, or the biggest geek in campus. It's all about what you do with your life, and if you have faith enough to believe that you can be somebody. Faith is breaking down the wall that you put up around your heart, and giving people a chance to see what's inside, no matter who you are. It's allowing yourself to be loved, and loving other's in return, without holding back. It's about falling into a friend's arms and somehow knowing that those arms will hold you up. It's about looking into the face of someone who died and whispering "see you later" instead of "goodbye". Above all, faith is hope. It's hope for the present, and the future.

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2 Answers to “What do you think of this essay…i am 17…i entered it into a contest a couple weeks back….is it any good?”

  1. secerning says:

    So, I already gave you a not so nice comment (you know that one, it stuck out like a sore thumb) on your poem, so I won’t give you one here, but I think that it is not good to share your work on here. People can give you opinions that aren’t correct, or just give you something nice. I just think that you should stick to getting opinions on your work form educated people. But in any event, your essay was short, but very, very good. Perfect. You got through all the emotion you needed. If you did it longer, though, it might be too much, so I don’t know. I am a writer of novels, but I still think that this is good.

  2. multivalvular says:

    I can clearly see your line, and I guess that’s the purpose of your essay… congrants on that! it is convincing and your point of view is obvious.Gramatically wise, I’m not sure what was requested from you, so i would relax and wait for a positive result ;-) All the best